| Sentence length | Reader experience |
|---|---|
| Under 15 words | Easy — crisp and clear |
| 15–25 words | Fine if well structured |
| Over 30 words | Reader gets lost; re-reads or gives up |
| Over 40 words | Almost always two or three sentences hiding as one |
| Passive (vague) | Active (clear) |
|---|---|
| It was decided that funds would be reallocated. | The board reallocated the funds. |
| Mistakes were made in the survey. | Our field team mis-coded 40 forms. |
| The training was attended by 60 women. | Sixty women attended the training. |
| Abstract | Concrete |
|---|---|
| beneficiaries / stakeholders | farmers, mothers, students, the village council |
| interventions | the training, the clinic, the loans |
| capacity-building activities | we trained 30 nurses |
| service-delivery modalities | how we run the clinics |
| Nominalised (heavy) | Verb (light) |
|---|---|
| We undertook the implementation of the plan. | We carried out the plan. |
| The utilisation of resources was poor. | We used resources poorly. |
| A decision was reached regarding closure. | We decided to close it. |
| Buzzword | What it often hides | Say instead |
|---|---|---|
| leverage | use | use, draw on |
| synergy | working together | work together |
| capacity-build | train, support | train, mentor, fund |
| mainstream | include routinely | build into our normal work |
| paradigm shift | a big change | a big change |
| low-hanging fruit | easy wins | the easy wins |
| Reader | Wants | Watch out for |
|---|---|---|
| Donor | Results, value for money, low risk | Over-claiming; vague outcomes |
| Community | Respect, plain words, usefulness | Jargon; talking down |
| Government | Alignment with policy, data, protocol | Informality; ignoring their schemes |
| Media | A clear story, a human angle, a number | Dense detail; no headline |
| Reader | Same finding, their version |
|---|---|
| Donor | Enrolment rose 22% against a 15% target, within budget. |
| Community | More of our children are now in school than last year. |
| Government | Enrolment rose 22%, in line with the SSA targets for the block. |
| Media | A village school doubled its girls' enrolment in one year. |
| Weak subject | Strong subject |
|---|---|
| Update | Field report submitted — review by Fri 12 June |
| Important!! | Action needed: sign MoU before 10 June |
| Meeting | Confirm: budget call moved to Tue 3pm |
| Hi | Question on NFHS data for the WASH section |
| Decision / Action | Owner | By when |
|---|---|---|
| Finalise budget revision | Priya | 12 June |
| Share NFHS extract with team | Arif | 8 June |
| Draft donor update | Meena | 15 June |
| Use WhatsApp for | Use email for |
|---|---|
| Quick yes/no, urgent ping | Anything that needs a record |
| Field coordination, photos | Decisions, approvals, money |
| Informal team chat | Donors, government, formal asks |
| ‘Running late’ | Attachments and long detail |
| Tripping point | Fits international convention |
|---|---|
| The team are submitting… (group) | The team is submitting… (US/intl: singular) |
| The data is clear | The data are clear (formal/academic: plural) |
| Each of the women have… | Each of the women has… |
| One of the reports were late | One of the reports was late |
| Use | Example |
|---|---|
| a / an (one, new) | We ran a training in Patna. |
| the (specific, known) | The training we ran went well. |
| no article (general) | Training improves outcomes. |
| For… | Use | Example |
|---|---|---|
| What you did | Past simple | We trained 30 nurses. |
| What the data shows | Present simple | The data show a 22% rise. |
| Ongoing work | Present continuous | We are scaling to four blocks. |
| Findings that still hold | Present simple | Female literacy lowers fertility. |
| Common slip | International convention |
|---|---|
| discuss about the plan | discuss the plan |
| comprise of three parts | comprise three parts |
| cope up with the load | cope with the load |
| different than last year | different from last year |
| Indian English | International (donor) English | Both are valid |
|---|---|---|
| kindly revert | please reply | context decides |
| do the needful | please take the necessary action | context decides |
| prepone the meeting | move the meeting earlier | context decides |
| intimate the team | inform / notify the team | context decides |
| Section | Answers | Keep it |
|---|---|---|
| Executive summary | What should I know? | 1 page, standalone |
| Context / problem | Why this work? | Short, sourced |
| What we did | The activities | Concrete, past tense |
| Findings | What happened? | Evidence, with numbers |
| Recommendations | So what now? | Specific, actionable |
| Weak (vague) | Strong (actionable) |
|---|---|
| Strengthen the system. | Add a second nurse to each of the 4 clinics by Q3. |
| Raise awareness. | Run 12 village meetings before the monsoon. |
| Improve coordination. | Hold a monthly review with the block officer. |
| Raw statistic | Plain sentence |
|---|---|
| TFR fell from 2.7 to 2.0 | Families are having fewer children than a decade ago. |
| 62% vs 38% completion | Boys finish school far more often than girls here. |
| n=636,000 households | One of the largest health surveys in the world. |
| Overclaims cause | Honest wording |
|---|---|
| The training raised incomes. | Incomes rose among those trained. |
| Literacy reduces fertility. | Higher literacy is linked with lower fertility. |
| Our clinic cut mortality. | Mortality fell after the clinic opened. |
| Labelling | People-first |
|---|---|
| the poor / the disabled | people living in poverty / with disabilities |
| AIDS victims | people living with HIV |
| illiterate women | women who have not had schooling |
| slum-dwellers | residents of informal settlements |